Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on "COWBOYS ARE STRANGE CATS"

Robert, I like the retro vibe of the music, but not sure about the title.  You only have it in the opening line and not in the chorus at all.  I know sometimes we need to bend the rules… maybe if you had the hook in a few... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Love's An Eternal Flame

Hi Ronnie!  First, I’d like to say I think your lyric writing is getting better.  Keep at it. In the chorus, I’d suggest either changing the “we” in the second line to “you”, or changing the “you” in the first line to “us”.  Maybe change... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Since He Won't Leave

Like Robert, I have conflicting feelings about the theme of the song, but if your faith is strong enough, go with it. Word wise, watch your “but"s, “and"s and “that”‘s.  They are often used as “filler” words that don’t add anything to the song except... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on "I'm Still Alive"

Robert, I know you said this wasn’t written for radio, but with a few tweaks here and there, I believe it could be relevant in today’s music.  Songs of hope and inspiration are always popular.  And yes, everyone has felt this way at one time or... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on You're My Only Dream

Hey Charles, I’m going to be a little more picky than Barry, but mean it with the best of intent. In V1L2, I’d go with “never came true”.  In L3, “is looking real solid”.  In L4, you have an unnecessary “there”.  Dropping it doesn’... Read More