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This is a story about a woman who is regretfully planning to end a relationship. The music is in 5/4 and we think it might fit best as a synch placement. This song was a collaboration between myself, Mauro Clerici and Darlene Pappalardo. Thanks for listening!
Any feedback appreciated!
Nice production and vocal. I’m not sure the interlude (Ooh parts?) add anything for me but I like the vocal in general.
Nice job!
July 17, 2018
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Thank Laurie! You know I thought the same thing regarding the “like-minded” song taste. Thank you for having the grace to stop by and take a listen. I look forward to hearing more of your songs!
July 17, 2018
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Hi Chad, we are still fine tuning and I have to agree with you regarding the “Ooh parts.” Thank goodness that’s an easy fix. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by and give your feedback.
July 17, 2018
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Oh I like this! I like the melody changing in the middle of the song. Your voice is so powerful. Matches the intensity of the song lyrics. Great job!
July 18, 2018
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Hi Dori thank you for charing this unique song. I like the special vibe, in invites me to lay back and concentrate on the music. Nice singing and guitar arrangement, great job, reminds me a bit to the late David Crosby. I’m sure there is an audience for this beautiful music. Let us know when we can stream/download/buy it somewhere.
July 18, 2018
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Hi Sandy and Frank,
Thank you for stopping by to listen…we really enjoyed doing this and had some great help in the studio. Hopefully we will be able to tweek it with all of your suggestions before we make it available to the public. Thanks again for the feedback and the listen:)
July 19, 2018
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Nice and “floaty” (in places, musically slightly reminiscent of Joni Mitchell), vocal intonation VERY solid!!! Best of luck!
July 26, 2018
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Very open and breezy feel here. I also get a nice Joni Mitchell vibe, beautiful…
August 03, 2018
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So when are you going to post some more of your songs, so we can listen to them, and “revel in your luxurious musical presence?” 
[It’s not everybody that gets the distinct pleasure of a “Bob Abner over-adjectivized phrase!” [Is that even a word???]
OK, all of my goofiness out of the way, I WOULD like to hear more of your music! HONESTLY!!!
August 09, 2018
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So very nice of you to comment again Bob. I appreciate your words and encouragement. Right now I am diligently redoing many of my songs as I have new gear so you know what THAT means…..being a hermit, hunkering down and doin’ the work:) Love your music….tasteful and elegant:)
P.S. I noticed that you write Christian music too…have you ever attended WAJ or Gaither Intensive?
August 09, 2018
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Not familiar with WAJ or Gaither Intensive—have attended several NQCs (National Quartet Conventions, which used to be held every year here in Louisville)—I am curious about WAJ and Gaither Intensive—a good friend of mine (J D Miller) used to be Bill Gaither’s pianist and musical director for 13 years, and there’s ALWAYS some outstanding singers/instrumentalists around Bill Gaither—I LOVE Gordon Mote—I just think he’s GREAT!!! I’ll try to do some digging around about the two things you mentioned. You seem to like some of my music, and I really enjoyed listening to this song—this reminds me of a joke—It’s the end of the gig, and two trumpet players are chatting. One says to the other, “Man, you sounded GREAT tonight; your solos were too fine, your sound was great—just TOO FINE”—then he waits a couple of seconds, and then says, “OK, it’s YOUR turn!!!” fwiw, I like this song better and better the more I hear it! I am curious how you and your co-writers decided to do a song in 5/4
August 13, 2018
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I ALSO do like the fact that you have a really nice voice—really STRONG (I always thought a STRONG voice was about the hardest thing to develop in a singer)—I DO LIKE LISTENING TO YOU SING!!!
August 13, 2018
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Wow, I love this song and the marriage of lyrics/message and music are powerful! It sounds like your character is trying to convince herself in the lines of the chorus, which is a very cool poignant emotion/situation many of us can relate to, if we’ve been in that type of relationship.
Did you play the guitar parts and are you singing the vocals?
Awesome song Dori!
August 15, 2018
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Bob and Reid,
Thanks for listening. Yes I’m singing and Mauro (one of the co-writers) is playing the guitar. The lyrics still need work and further clarification…. someday. Thanks again to you both for your encouraging words and for stopping by.
August 15, 2018
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As I reviewed the comment history, I kind of figured you were the vocalist on the track. Mauro does a great job on the guitar track and it is interesting, unique, and fits your song well.
Your vocals and your voice are KILLER!
August 15, 2018
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Dori,
Love your voice and the feel of this song.
Here’s what I hear:
First, it’s unclear whether singer and singer are face-to-face or whether they are apart. Once you settle on that, you can adjust the lyric accordingly.
Second, your hook is a bit confusing.
First appearance says “Today for sure, gonna change my ways….”
Second appearance says “Today for sure, I’ll
make up my mind…”
Third appearance says ” we’ll settle the score…Today for sure.”
It might work better if you craft one hook that summarizes what you want to say. And that can be repeated so it worms its way into mind of the listener.
Thus, the verses could give the particulars of the situation or relationship that, in turn, serves as a setup for your title/hook. In effect, And that’s why I say TODAY FOR SURE…
Keep going. Great start.
November 12, 2018
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Hi Reid,
Thanks for the feedback. I haven’t been coming here very often and I just discovered your comments. Thanks so much and I trust you are writing with the fever….wishing you continued success.
Hi Lee,
Thank you for the feedback regarding the lyrics. I was asked to provide vocals and write a melody for this tune but I will most certainly share your pertinent feedback with Darlene, the lyricist. Thanks again, much appreciated!
November 12, 2018
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Great song Dori!
I like the clear message of the song and the clear vocal. The music is awesome!
Is this the song you brought NASI in Arlington last year?
July 08, 2019
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Hi Bob!
Thanks for stopping by! Not sure if I ever took this song to NSAI, don’t think so since I did not write the lyrics. I wrote the melody and did the vocals. Anyway, hope y’all are doing great and that God is blessing you abundantly!
July 08, 2019
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V:
There has come to choose
Do I go away or stay and fight, afraid to lose
Is there a better way oh there has to be
Give up all I have to make you come to me
PC:
If I knew for sure
I'd know just what to do
I'd get on a plane
Come runnin' back to you
C:
Today for sure, goin' to change my ways
Make a better plan, today for sure
Interlude
V:
If you were a better man I wouldn't have to choose
We could find a way so neither one of us would lose
Will you give in, will I let you go
The answer to that, I still don't know, I still don't know
PC:
If I knew for sure
I'd know just what to do
I'd get on a plane
Come runnin' back to you
C:
Today for sure I'll make up my mind
Today for sure, it's the truth I'll find
Tag:
Yeah
We'll settle the score
Share tears no more
That will be today for sure
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You and I write incredibly like minded songs. I love this song Andrea the emotional presentation blew me away. It’s a universal theme conststructed in a unique form. Well done Dori.
July 17, 2018
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Nice production and vocal. I’m not sure the interlude (Ooh parts?) add anything for me but I like the vocal in general.
Nice job!
July 17, 2018
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Thank Laurie! You know I thought the same thing regarding the “like-minded” song taste. Thank you for having the grace to stop by and take a listen. I look forward to hearing more of your songs!
July 17, 2018
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Hi Chad, we are still fine tuning and I have to agree with you regarding the “Ooh parts.” Thank goodness that’s an easy fix. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by and give your feedback.
July 17, 2018
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Oh I like this! I like the melody changing in the middle of the song. Your voice is so powerful. Matches the intensity of the song lyrics. Great job!
July 18, 2018
0
Hi Dori thank you for charing this unique song. I like the special vibe, in invites me to lay back and concentrate on the music. Nice singing and guitar arrangement, great job, reminds me a bit to the late David Crosby. I’m sure there is an audience for this beautiful music. Let us know when we can stream/download/buy it somewhere.
July 18, 2018
0
Hi Sandy and Frank,
Thank you for stopping by to listen…we really enjoyed doing this and had some great help in the studio. Hopefully we will be able to tweek it with all of your suggestions before we make it available to the public. Thanks again for the feedback and the listen:)
July 19, 2018
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Nice and “floaty” (in places, musically slightly reminiscent of Joni Mitchell), vocal intonation VERY solid!!! Best of luck!
July 26, 2018
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Very open and breezy feel here. I also get a nice Joni Mitchell vibe, beautiful…
August 03, 2018
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So when are you going to post some more of your songs, so we can listen to them, and “revel in your luxurious musical presence?” [It’s not everybody that gets the distinct pleasure of a “Bob Abner over-adjectivized phrase!” [Is that even a word???]
OK, all of my goofiness out of the way, I WOULD like to hear more of your music! HONESTLY!!!
August 09, 2018
0
So very nice of you to comment again Bob. I appreciate your words and encouragement. Right now I am diligently redoing many of my songs as I have new gear so you know what THAT means…..being a hermit, hunkering down and doin’ the work:) Love your music….tasteful and elegant:)
P.S. I noticed that you write Christian music too…have you ever attended WAJ or Gaither Intensive?
August 09, 2018
0
Not familiar with WAJ or Gaither Intensive—have attended several NQCs (National Quartet Conventions, which used to be held every year here in Louisville)—I am curious about WAJ and Gaither Intensive—a good friend of mine (J D Miller) used to be Bill Gaither’s pianist and musical director for 13 years, and there’s ALWAYS some outstanding singers/instrumentalists around Bill Gaither—I LOVE Gordon Mote—I just think he’s GREAT!!! I’ll try to do some digging around about the two things you mentioned. You seem to like some of my music, and I really enjoyed listening to this song—this reminds me of a joke—It’s the end of the gig, and two trumpet players are chatting. One says to the other, “Man, you sounded GREAT tonight; your solos were too fine, your sound was great—just TOO FINE”—then he waits a couple of seconds, and then says, “OK, it’s YOUR turn!!!” fwiw, I like this song better and better the more I hear it! I am curious how you and your co-writers decided to do a song in 5/4
August 13, 2018
0
I ALSO do like the fact that you have a really nice voice—really STRONG (I always thought a STRONG voice was about the hardest thing to develop in a singer)—I DO LIKE LISTENING TO YOU SING!!!
August 13, 2018
0
Wow, I love this song and the marriage of lyrics/message and music are powerful! It sounds like your character is trying to convince herself in the lines of the chorus, which is a very cool poignant emotion/situation many of us can relate to, if we’ve been in that type of relationship.
Did you play the guitar parts and are you singing the vocals?
Awesome song Dori!
August 15, 2018
0
Bob and Reid,
Thanks for listening. Yes I’m singing and Mauro (one of the co-writers) is playing the guitar. The lyrics still need work and further clarification…. someday. Thanks again to you both for your encouraging words and for stopping by.
August 15, 2018
0
As I reviewed the comment history, I kind of figured you were the vocalist on the track. Mauro does a great job on the guitar track and it is interesting, unique, and fits your song well.
Your vocals and your voice are KILLER!
August 15, 2018
0
Dori,
Love your voice and the feel of this song.
Here’s what I hear:
First, it’s unclear whether singer and singer are face-to-face or whether they are apart. Once you settle on that, you can adjust the lyric accordingly.
Second, your hook is a bit confusing.
First appearance says “Today for sure, gonna change my ways….”
Second appearance says “Today for sure, I’ll
make up my mind…”
Third appearance says ” we’ll settle the score…Today for sure.”
It might work better if you craft one hook that summarizes what you want to say. And that can be repeated so it worms its way into mind of the listener.
Thus, the verses could give the particulars of the situation or relationship that, in turn, serves as a setup for your title/hook. In effect, And that’s why I say TODAY FOR SURE…
Keep going. Great start.
November 12, 2018
0
Hi Reid,
Thanks for the feedback. I haven’t been coming here very often and I just discovered your comments. Thanks so much and I trust you are writing with the fever….wishing you continued success.
Hi Lee,
Thank you for the feedback regarding the lyrics. I was asked to provide vocals and write a melody for this tune but I will most certainly share your pertinent feedback with Darlene, the lyricist. Thanks again, much appreciated!
November 12, 2018
0
Great song Dori!
I like the clear message of the song and the clear vocal. The music is awesome!
Is this the song you brought NASI in Arlington last year?
July 08, 2019
0
Hi Bob!
Thanks for stopping by! Not sure if I ever took this song to NSAI, don’t think so since I did not write the lyrics. I wrote the melody and did the vocals. Anyway, hope y’all are doing great and that God is blessing you abundantly!
July 08, 2019
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You and I write incredibly like minded songs. I love this song Andrea the emotional presentation blew me away. It’s a universal theme conststructed in a unique form. Well done Dori.
July 17, 2018
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