Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on My Farmer Man

I’ll add, I know you said this was only for fun, but writing better “fun” songs makes writing better “commercial” songs easier.  Sounds like you’ve got a pretty good track person! Phillip

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on My Farmer Man

Not trying to tell you how to write your songs, but you’ve got too many syllables in several of the lines.  Too many throws the melody off and hurries the line, some of which I can’t understand without reading the lyrics. If I were writing this, it... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Hypnotized

I like the music as it fits the theme, but I think the lyrics need a little polishing. I’m a little confused.  In the chorus you say you’ve got a foot out the door, but in V1, he’s the one leaving.  If you meant he... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Sorry I Ain't Sorry Anymore

Billy, my apologies if the above post seems harsh, I didn’t mean it that way.  I should have phrased it better!  I think my own frustrations were coming through for the times I’ve been told the same thing. Keep writing, Phillip

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Sorry I Ain't Sorry Anymore

The title/hook is a little catchy, but I don’t believe your theme will fly.  Why does somebody want to listen to a song about a self-centered guy who’s dumping his girl?  I’ve written a couple of songs like this.  When I show them... Read More