Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on I Can’t Wait (updated work in progress) © 2017

Might be the music, but to me this version sounds a little darker than your earlier version.  As Benny said of the first one, the rhyme scheme kind of throws everything off, but please, experiment away. I still think the verses aren’t painting the mental images they should.... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on How Many Ways

Good song!  They always say to find a different way to say “I love you”, and you came up with “How many ways”.  I like it! I’m thinking in V1 the phrase “I blew up your phone” might be cliche these days, as I’ve heard it... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Champion

Micky, you’re more likely to get more and better feedback by posting the “clean” versions of your songs on this site.  I realize that you’re in a part of the country where explicit lyrics were born, but other parts of the country still has a problem with... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on Move Tonight

I think your cutting yourself off at the knees by including the F word in the lyrics, as radio stations won’t be able to play it.  Satellite radio could still play it, but you’re potentially losing a bigger audience.  I think I’d also change the “... Read More

Phillip Lemmonds gave feedback on She Said

I think the chord progression in the verses makes this one sound a little dated.  Otherwise, everything else sounds current.  Given your ability to write, I didn’t scrutinize the lyrics closely. Phillip